Monday, August 10, 2009

Rapunzel's Revenge Part 1

This is my version of 'Rapunzel's Revenge'.  It is already a story but I decided to rewrite it. Enjoy!!

It all began after the two love birds got married and decided to go on a honeymoon.  The prince suggested that they go to Hawaii, but Rapunzel disagreed.  She longed to get revenge on the wicked witch. 

 The witch had been in the WILD WEST with people whispering all the time about her.  She cackles no nicer than having a cactus needle poking you.  Just hearing her voice makes people feel like a poisonous snake is slithering down their backs.  But everyone knows that you should never, ever, in the history of never, make eye contact with the old witch.

The prince plastered a smile on his face, not wanting the beautiful girl get over temper.  Rapunzel knew all along that the prince was a fraud, no stronger than a blade of grass. 

The following morning, the prince woke up to find that a pair of boots was sitting where Rapunzel had been sleeping.  With annoyance he dragged himself out of bed and sat on the comfy couch.  

The lazy prince fell a sleep in the blink of an eye, only to be pulled off the couch by a cow girl maniac!!  "Howdy Yo!" the maniac shouted.  The prince was angrier than a rampage of rhinos," What's the big idea?! " he shrieked at the top of his lungs.  The prince then noticed Rapunzel, her eyes seemed to be lit with fire......... TO BE CONTINUED

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2 comments:

  1. Hi Toreka,
    WOW! I really liked the way that you used adverbs and describing words in your story. Keep it up!My favourite bit was when you said she cackles no nicer than having a cactus needle poking you.Tino pai Toreka.

    Bye for now!!!

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  2. Oooooh you are building suspense here Toreka. My favourite sentence is "Just hearing her voice makes people feel like a poisonous snake is slithering down their backs".
    Please don't make us wait too long for the next instalment :)
    Mrs Burt

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